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My fic Mon Été Sans Soucis took 3rd place in a contest held over at DA. Here's what the judge's had to say about it:
Details:
Theme: “Well… That was awkward…”
Originality: 13/15
Use of Theme: 11½/15
Aesthetics of your chosen art form: 14/15
Total: 38½/45
Comments:
Zoe-ap – The way that you have written this story is amazing! The theme for your entry is not as pronounced as others, but that is understandable as I can see that you have used it with other things. How you have managed to incorporate the history is truly outstanding!
Sarebear16 – This was a blush-worthy read but enjoyable to read the style of your writing. The way you described the character, their surroundings and their thoughts set this apart for me personally, you wrote in detail which is something I personally strive to achieve and enjoy reading immensely. I think that this story was paired seamlessly with your theme and you did well to express it within your writing. I think you captured Prussia’s character well in this and I also this the inclusion of different languages both in and out the bedroom was and interesting touch, well done.
Animefreak141 – I really liked the fact that, unlike many hetalia fan fiction writers, you did research and based the fan fiction on that research. And, let’s face the facts, I’m the kind of person that will like a fan fiction if it has a good lemon, and you my dear, can write a good lemon~ :D I also loved the flow and the build to the lemon and then the funny end. (The awkwardness at the end was along the same lines of how I would write it.) Overall it was a great job, and entertaining story-line.
My other entry, Of Memories and Music came in 5th, which isn't too bad, seeing how I kinda pulled it out of nowhere. I had thought I had more time to write it than I did. XD
Here's what they had to say about it:
Kiramaru7:
Theme: Spirit
Originality: 13/15
Use of Theme: 13/15
Aesthetics of your chosen art form: 11/15
Total: 37/45
Comments:
Zoe-ap – Another wonderful entry! This could be considered either a one-shot or a continuation of Mon Ete Sans Soucis, which gives the story another level of depth. It appears effortless how you have managed to gain an insight to the “life” of a country.
Searbear16 – Your story was very informative and enchanting. I enjoyed reading about Prussia’s reminiscing of his long gone friend. The detail in this was an enhancing feature to the story and helped elaborate Prussia’s surroundings and feelings. The way you wrote the story was fantastic. I was drawn in to the story and enjoyed it very much!
Animefreak141 – TT-TT Going from the playful happiness to this sombre story was depressing!!! But it was a great story nonetheless. I preferred the use of the theme in this one… I don’t even know why… but I did~ I also liked how Prussia showed a slightly softer side than he usually would, and you managed to do it so it wasn’t like a bi polar Prussia either, which was really awesome. That together with the few lighter sides of the story made it for a particularly awesome read!!
Details:
Theme: “Well… That was awkward…”
Originality: 13/15
Use of Theme: 11½/15
Aesthetics of your chosen art form: 14/15
Total: 38½/45
Comments:
Zoe-ap – The way that you have written this story is amazing! The theme for your entry is not as pronounced as others, but that is understandable as I can see that you have used it with other things. How you have managed to incorporate the history is truly outstanding!
Sarebear16 – This was a blush-worthy read but enjoyable to read the style of your writing. The way you described the character, their surroundings and their thoughts set this apart for me personally, you wrote in detail which is something I personally strive to achieve and enjoy reading immensely. I think that this story was paired seamlessly with your theme and you did well to express it within your writing. I think you captured Prussia’s character well in this and I also this the inclusion of different languages both in and out the bedroom was and interesting touch, well done.
Animefreak141 – I really liked the fact that, unlike many hetalia fan fiction writers, you did research and based the fan fiction on that research. And, let’s face the facts, I’m the kind of person that will like a fan fiction if it has a good lemon, and you my dear, can write a good lemon~ :D I also loved the flow and the build to the lemon and then the funny end. (The awkwardness at the end was along the same lines of how I would write it.) Overall it was a great job, and entertaining story-line.
My other entry, Of Memories and Music came in 5th, which isn't too bad, seeing how I kinda pulled it out of nowhere. I had thought I had more time to write it than I did. XD
Here's what they had to say about it:
Kiramaru7:
Theme: Spirit
Originality: 13/15
Use of Theme: 13/15
Aesthetics of your chosen art form: 11/15
Total: 37/45
Comments:
Zoe-ap – Another wonderful entry! This could be considered either a one-shot or a continuation of Mon Ete Sans Soucis, which gives the story another level of depth. It appears effortless how you have managed to gain an insight to the “life” of a country.
Searbear16 – Your story was very informative and enchanting. I enjoyed reading about Prussia’s reminiscing of his long gone friend. The detail in this was an enhancing feature to the story and helped elaborate Prussia’s surroundings and feelings. The way you wrote the story was fantastic. I was drawn in to the story and enjoyed it very much!
Animefreak141 – TT-TT Going from the playful happiness to this sombre story was depressing!!! But it was a great story nonetheless. I preferred the use of the theme in this one… I don’t even know why… but I did~ I also liked how Prussia showed a slightly softer side than he usually would, and you managed to do it so it wasn’t like a bi polar Prussia either, which was really awesome. That together with the few lighter sides of the story made it for a particularly awesome read!!
